Name: Jeren Olimiel Age: 18 Gender: Male Race: Hylian Place of Origin: Rauru PWC: 3/1/3 Treasures: Boomerang, Chevel Rope Height: 6 feet Weight: 183 pounds Equipment: His main weapon is his Gerudo sandhook. The sandhook is a spearlike weapon, but with a sharp, cruel hook attached to the spearhead. At the bottom is a hole drilled in the wood through which he can tie his Chevel Rope. It can be thrown as a spear, but its main purpose is the capture of Sand Gyorgs that reside in the Silk Sands. Appearance: Jeren is tall, and while not very wide, is quite muscular. His skin, while not as dark as a Gerudo, is far tanner and darker than the normal Hylian peach. His hair is a matted dirty blonde clump on top of his head, not really meshing well colorwise with his tan skin. He wears a short sleeved white shirt and a dark red vest. He has a belt tied over his shoulder and across his back, on which he hangs both his boomerang and sheaths his sandhook. His pants are brown and baggy. He wears rather simple sandals over his calloused feet. His most odd physical feature is a large birthmark stretching across his back, a Gerudo symbol of the Sand Goddess. Residence: A small hollowed out room in the east caves. Only houses a cot and a small chest for ritualistic clothing. Backstory: Jeren was born in the desert city of Rauru, three years prior to the attack by the forces of Ganon. His family were among the oldest in the city, himself descended from the explorer who founded Rauru itself. He was born with a birthmark across his back, a Gerudo symbol for the Sand Goddess. On the day of Ganon's bloody attack, his family was one of the last to run. His father had elected to make sure everyone else had left before they ran themselves. The moblins were already running through the square when they left with another family who had been abandoned. The dark army was gaining quickly and would have slaughtered them all, when suddenly the sand beneath their feet began to move. A wall of sand surrounded them all, and before they knew it they stood before the gates to the Gerudo Fortress. When the Gerudo saw the symbol on the young boy's back they took it as a sign from their patron Goddess, raising him alongside his parents as a warrior. He quickly learned both the Hylian and Gerudo ways, mastering both the Gerudo sandhook and the Hylian boomerang. At the age of thirteen he joined the battle against the Moblins and Stalfos besieging the caves, fighting alongside his younger cousin Halbon. During an ill planned attack on the dark armies at the age of fifteen, he was forced to watch as Halbon was dragged away by the Moblins, screaming. He gave chase, following the Moblin band far into the desert. He slew the Moblins only to find Halbon dead, buried below the sand. Sickened, he returned to the Fortress carrying his younger cousin's torn body back to his aunt. Because of the death of his beloved cousin, he threw himself into his training, becoming even more brutal. He wishes to destroy the Moblins, no matter the cost, and doesn't care what he has to do to do it.
Erm. I hate to do this, but it really seems like this character should have more detail put into it, at least in the areas of appearance and backstory. You don't even describe at all what a "sandhook" is, despite it apparently being the character's main weapon. Consider this incomplete for now.
Sorry but i'm going to have to reject this app. Its just too mary sue with the birthmark. I suggest removing it or fixing it up along with the Back story.
